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Jealous over a maybe (Lyric) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
With his arm across your waist And your fingers lingering underneath his shirt Spinning circles on his chest This night is a waste at best You can't be serious Have you looked at me? I say all the perfect words And I'm smoothe and stylish With a smile and an introduction I can make myself part of any regulars But I can't change the fact That your on his arm Whats he got that I haven't got Name one thing he can do better Because then I'll be amazed By the way he was rushing off to the pasted out phase I'd be stunned and dazed Maybe even knocked down a peg or two But until then... I'll remember when... I called you and then... I walked in and after that... We sat together and had a chat... I'm still confused... Leading me on and then turning me away? How?

Up the ladder: Puritans
Down the ladder: To My Love

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.272727
Weighted score: 6.6363635
Overall Rank: 574
Posted: December 29, 2004 2:04 AM PST; Last modified: December 29, 2004 2:04 AM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 | 29-Dec-04/11:12 AM | Reply
Lost her eh? Too smooth and stylish maybe. Couldn't prove it by the way you spelled smooth, what's and you're.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.161.179.102 > Dovina | 29-Dec-04/11:37 AM | Reply
No one said literate, and this is what I'd call a shitty off the top of my head poem. Sucks but meh? Its not I love you... I hate you... I can't live without you, so why I write about how wonderful you were shite. As for whether or not I lost her, that remains to be seen.

<3 Jason
[10] Lifeboatman @ 203.104.94.2 | 29-Dec-04/7:00 PM | Reply
I don't know why others voted that way... maybe they think they are so smart to realize how stupid they really are.. great one you have here.. 10...
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