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Distance (Free verse) by Lifeboatman
I dream of you throughout this lunar arc Where yon treetops bask in moving manna Of stardust and wind-swept imagination And of music, this still night, had left intrepid This night, which soothes nature's harsh stimuli Shall also let Sleep, your memories, mimic Even if you deign give them to someone else For we cannot but prove to your nostalgia alumni And to your prophecy non-existent else minimal I at least had admitted a long time ago To be of this function in this life you live Even if you prove to be an angel most heavenly For Music made Heaven yearn a place to go to And both of us saw perfection in you

Up the ladder: Dirty Heaven
Down the ladder: Tabula Rasa

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7906
Posted: December 28, 2004 5:10 AM PST; Last modified: December 28, 2004 5:10 AM PST
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Comments:
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 | 28-Dec-04/2:37 PM | Reply
Too vague
[n/a] Lifeboatman @ 203.104.94.2 > Dovina | 29-Dec-04/4:34 AM | Reply
really?? I haven't noticed...
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > Lifeboatman | 29-Dec-04/10:38 AM | Reply
Yes, Verse 2 especially escapes me.
[n/a] Lifeboatman @ 203.104.94.2 > Dovina | 29-Dec-04/6:51 PM | Reply
Oh it just means that I am but a part of her past and may just play a minimal role or maybe nothing in her future...
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > Lifeboatman | 29-Dec-04/7:30 PM | Reply
It's vague because of "nostalgia alumni" which maybe should be "nostalgic alumni." And because of "prophecy non-existent else minimal" which maybe should be "unfulfilled prophesy."
[n/a] Lifeboatman @ 203.104.94.2 > Dovina | 29-Dec-04/8:06 PM | Reply
nah.. I just forgot commas...
[9] Bhaskaryya @ 61.0.144.54 | 29-Dec-04/7:00 PM | Reply
Awesome!!!
[n/a] Lifeboatman @ 203.104.94.2 > Bhaskaryya | 29-Dec-04/7:09 PM | Reply
thanks...
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