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Better Sex (Free verse) by Dovina
A double date, four in a car, my friend and her boyfriend in front, his friend and I in back. After ice skating cold at Winter Gardens, we parked warm at her house, to save money, save gas, before he drove us home. He put his arm around her, kissed her hard, and they giggled for a while, before her strap slid down somehow, leaving her left shoulder bare. We couldn’t see lower, but something at trouser level seemed to make him joyful. I looked at him, and he at me, as if to say, Let’s spend the money, save the disgust, Walk five miles or call a cab. She was working on his shirt now, his mouth all over her face. I looked at him, and he at me, and it occurred me and him together, we might wish to stay, observe, and take some notes. She helped him with the bra closure, and they slid below the seatback, while we listened and imagined, and giggled once in a while. He walked her to the door, Drove quietly to our houses, and late that night, I got a call. We talked for an hour, maybe two, he in his bed, I in mine, and just before the final click, he said that what we’d shared tonight was more of our true selves, more intimate than theirs, and we should talk again.

Down the ladder: Sunset

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Weighted score: 6.181818
Overall Rank: 1007
Posted: December 14, 2004 10:37 AM PST; Last modified: December 14, 2004 10:37 AM PST
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Comments:
[7] sir_heff @ 65.172.117.1 | 14-Dec-04/10:45 AM | Reply
oooh sexy
[n/a] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 > sir_heff | 15-Dec-04/10:25 AM | Reply
Thank you. I'm glad you see it that way.
[5] JoyLuck @ 65.60.139.26 | 15-Dec-04/12:30 AM | Reply
This poem has the case of the blue balls. Tell me more.

"bra closure" - how sexy...
[n/a] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 > JoyLuck | 15-Dec-04/10:16 AM | Reply
I told you plenty!
[10] blacksoul @ 204.215.33.55 | 15-Dec-04/2:13 AM | Reply
You and your date had more respect than your friend and her boyfriend.
[n/a] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 > blacksoul | 15-Dec-04/10:17 AM | Reply
Call it respect, but I think it was the jitters with a tinge of disgust.
[9] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.218.59.251 | 15-Dec-04/7:28 AM | Reply
You are a good girl and should submit this poem to Junior Scholastic Magazine.
[n/a] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 > Dan garcia-Black | 15-Dec-04/10:20 AM | Reply
They'd say I'm pathetic and should find moral friends and get over it and besides, I'm a dimtard to even name what he and I did sex.
[10] zodiac @ 212.118.14.17 | 16-Dec-04/5:36 AM | Reply
The best part is "but something at trouser level
seemed to make him joyful." -10-
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > zodiac | 17-Dec-04/3:38 PM | Reply
It is not. The best part was "more intimate than theirs."
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 80.47.198.114 | 11-Jan-07/5:15 PM | Reply
You didn't have 'Better Sex'. You didn't even have sex. You just talked for two boring hours on the phone. Talk about gutted.
[n/a] Dovina @ 75.82.85.162 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 11-Jan-07/6:03 PM | Reply
I feel violated, digging into my past that way. Is it curiosity or professional retainer, Mr. Private Investigator?

Of course it was not sex, but neither was it boring, and how could you know whether it was boring or not? You were not there; you are not me. Wait a minute, I haven’t seen that guy in a long time. Did you ever live in Southern California? No, not a chance!
[10] Sheeva @ 205.213.111.54 | 18-May-09/9:01 AM | Reply
VERY NICE!!!!
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