| Poem: Submit | Random | Best | Worst | Recent | Comments |
|
Hanging (Free verse) by celticskatermatt1 the feeling shocked my skin
of the rope around my neck
crisp air and blue skies
turned blood red that night
who was to blame
the infinite game
i shut my eyes and prayed to God
the rope it burned, it tore at my neck
my statue was swinging this way and that
Up the ladder:
depressed
Down the ladder:
Succulent Fruit
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.5555553
Posted: November 12, 2004 12:06 PM PST; Last modified: November 12, 2004 12:06 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.7777777 Overall Rank: 1737 Comments:
[7]
Dovina @ 69.175.6.101
|
12-Nov-04/12:16 PM
|
Reply
Better than your last, but punctuation would help, not hinder the flow, as some think.
[n/a]
celticskatermatt1 @ 68.7.187.148
> Dovina
|
12-Nov-04/12:22 PM
|
Reply
hey thanks--yea im working on my punct.
dnt. abbrivt. punct.
253 view(s)
|
||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
