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Mind's Eye (Villanelle) by Sean Allen
Can you capture and bottle up "insane," The forgotten mother of invention? Glimpse into the eye of the hurricane. I've got nothing to lose, nothing to gain, spending my time in hopeless dissension. Can you capture and bottle up "insane?" Stretch the difference between Abel and Cain; it is a case of violent compulsion. Glimpse into the eye of the hurricane. Its haphazard furies are all but tame; nature's actions seem to lack intention. Can you capture and bottle up "insane?" Tickling little winds that first seem plain may soon grow to majestic proportions. Glimpse into the eye of the hurricane. Furious, uncaring, every man's bane, it strikes without care or predilection. Can you capture and bottle up "insane?" Glimpse into the eye of the hurricane.

Up the ladder: Death
Down the ladder: sad bastard

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.4
Weighted score: 5.166884
Overall Rank: 5005
Posted: November 8, 2004 5:00 PM PST; Last modified: November 8, 2004 5:00 PM PST
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[7] Sasha @ 69.138.240.116 | 8-Nov-04/5:11 PM | Reply
Points for trying. Though you might want to look up the meaning of "iambic pentameter." You seem to have forgotten the Iambic part.
[n/a] Sean Allen @ 4.46.107.39 > Sasha | 8-Nov-04/5:34 PM | Reply
actually, not all villanelles are in iambic pentameter. I did however want to write it in pentameter, in order to give it a bit more rhythm.
[9] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 > Sasha | 9-Nov-04/1:34 PM | Reply
Hush.
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 | 8-Nov-04/7:55 PM | Reply
I think you could make this into a better poem by forgetting that someone told you villanelles are cool.
[9] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 > Dovina | 9-Nov-04/1:34 PM | Reply
That was pretty funny for a fat chick.
[6] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > Bachus | 12-Nov-04/9:28 AM | Reply
I step into my skirt one leg at a time, same as you. Or is that your other alias.
[9] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 | 9-Nov-04/1:33 PM | Reply
I was hoping for shit, but found a modicum of shine.
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