poemranker ::Jealousy's Game by TLRufener

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Free verse № 114132

Jealousy's Game

Member since 2004 · Posted 24 Oct 2004 · 7 comments

The lights had been dimmed, and the curtains had been drawn. The festivities had slowly moved to the mansion’s back lawn. Couple upon couple had joined for the dance, Each one carrying blossoms for a flowering romance. The orchestra played a favorite classical song As the couples took hands to waltz the whole night long. The sun had dipped low behind the tree-covered hill, As darkness began to fall, love grew even stronger still. Jealous rages tore through the thickness of the night; Their threatening knives had come to stab out the light. In a cozy little cottage tucked away in the trees, A stout tiny man worked away very busily. Papers strewn about with a pen in his hand, A diabolical scheme had become a plan. As the glittering stars shimmered up above, A lady held no thoughts of the man she used to love. There was a new man who wrapped her in his arms, Enveloping all her senses with his gentlemanly charms. No attention was paid to the cold lifeless breeze Or the stout man’s shadow as he left the cottage in the trees. The man ducked behind the bushes, catching the couple in his sight. One of the delightful pair would never again see the light. He quickly slipped a mask over his pudgy head In desire of the moment when his rage would be dead. Pausing for one moment until the couple came near; He had the perfect shot. The coast was clear. A masked assailant appeared through the gate in the back, With a cautiously drawn form; the plan for a perfect attack. His emotions raged on. He had to end the pain. Two shots were fired into the crowd. Jealousy had won the nasty game. The lady’s warm blood drew its way across the path As the masked assailant slipped into the night through the gate in the back. Not a word was spoken as a phantom slipped away. No condolences were granted as no one knew what to say. Death had bidden them a fond farewell As secrets faded with the lessening swell. A bloody rage had kept the spirits from their birth Unto the world above the beloved earth. Trapped in limbo on hallowed ground, Ghostly figures continue their ghastly rounds. The candles had dwindled from years before, And the tattered curtains lay covered in dust upon the floor. The glorious garden of a time long past Had withered and died; not meant to last. Ghostly couples dance in shrouds of blue Gliding across broken paths to linger the whole night through. A phantom waltz lurks in the dark of the night, Forever waiting until it may again see light.

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7 comments

[8] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 24-Oct-04/11:27 AM Reply
Clumsy in places, but I thought it was interesting and fairly original. I can't think of many people on this site who'd have the vision to include a tiny, stout, scheming man with a pudgy head in their love poemes, let alone the vision to have him feverishly planning out his revenge on paper. Is he a metaphor for the human condition?
[n/a] TLRufener › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 24-Oct-04/11:32 AM Reply
The stout man is the lady's ex-lover, whom she left for someone who looks better. He is a representation of how looks can alter choices when it comes to who loves whom.
[8] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › TLRufener 24-Oct-04/11:40 AM Reply
He's also a representation of how ugliness on the outside manifests itself on the inside, even to the point of murdering innocent civilians.
[n/a] TLRufener › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 24-Oct-04/11:43 AM Reply
Exactly.
[8] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › TLRufener 24-Oct-04/11:45 AM Reply
Really?
[n/a] TLRufener › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 24-Oct-04/11:47 AM Reply
Yes.
[8] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › TLRufener 24-Oct-04/11:52 AM Reply
Well it's great to meet someone else who thinks that ugly people are not only physically crippled, but morally crippled as well.