|
|
Being H.U.M.A.N. (Free verse) by SatanicSuperman
Being Human
6 days..22 hours..and 5 minutes
my heart unfolds into a butterfly
i'm beautiful, i'm gorgeous, i fly so high,
shot down, ripped to shreads,
fucked into your world,
i need this, i need this coma,
my breathe weakens from silence of aroma,
gracefulness bleeds the misery,
brain spills the ceramic
dead, scared, alive, beautiful,
wrapped inside your hive,
i've never felt so alive,
break me down, into your sound,
a single wave, how i hate the rave,
let the sun reign, feed me your strain,
to the left, beside my shame,
i find myself, in love, with beauty, filled aroma,
fucked into your coma.
Jeremy Crawford Dezarn
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
| Graph | Votes |
10 |
|
0 | 0 |
9 |
|
0 | 0 |
8 |
|
1 | 0 |
7 |
|
0 | 0 |
6 |
|
0 | 0 |
5 |
|
0 | 1 |
4 |
|
0 | 0 |
3 |
|
0 | 0 |
2 |
|
1 | 0 |
1 |
|
0 | 0 |
0 |
|
1 | 1 |
|
Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.7615943
Overall Rank: 11566
Posted: August 25, 2002 12:38 PM PDT; Last modified: August 25, 2002 12:38 PM PDT
View voting details
Comments:
119 view(s)
|
Other than that, I like it. The rhym is a little choppy, but I think you could smooth it out pretty easily.