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Sunrise (Free verse) by TLRufener The sun rises again
Iâve seen another night
Come and go
The only twinkling
Are the tears
That stain my cheeks
Once more I sleep none
With only a memory
Of my blissful dreams
Darkness fades
But the pain remains
And my heart aches
Alone as always
No one to hold me
In the chilled breeze
Up the ladder:
Then things forgotten inside
Down the ladder:
Yell!
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Posted: September 8, 2004 4:15 AM PDT; Last modified: September 8, 2004 4:15 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8814354 Overall Rank: 9973 Comments:
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Blue Magpie @ 62.103.229.231
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8-Sep-04/5:52 AM
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The line "Once more I sleep none" is so ungrammatic it pretty much ruins the rest of the poem, some punctuation would also help.
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