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thinking alike in regards to today and tomorrow (Free verse) by skaskowski
where dreams once slept
the bed has been moved
leaving only the floor as a haven...
rolling around in the feathers of then,
happiness only existent back then
My memories shove me towards
Never again
Allowing my heart to dangle from
a beautiful hand...
Floating on a boat of saran wrap
i contour with the waves as i
wander away,
guided by wind
and a sense of abandon
Towards the world i loved
before turning my eyes in
And screaming for black arms
to drag me away,
Hailing them like a taxi,
The fare paid with my last energy...
When the ceramic sky
was bashed from above by that cleansing hand,
it cracked and fell like a porcelain rain,
crackling on concrete and people alike,
Spreading fresh blood around on the
clay-littered ground...
a world bathed in flames
spurted steam from behind me
guiding my sails to
the emptiness beyond me,
for awhile my hands could scrape
the bottom of this shallow pool,
but now my hands have been ground off,
and the bottom is a million miles below....
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Weighted score: 5.3509483
Overall Rank: 3385
Posted: April 28, 2002 9:02 PM PDT; Last modified: April 28, 2002 9:02 PM PDT
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Only major nitpick with the poem was I didn't like the repetition of "then" twice (lines 4, 5).