nentwined29 Apr 2002

I'm afraid I really don't get this -- it makes too many leaps that I can't connect, fragments of images that could all well be separate poems, or lines from other poems. "Then the ceramic sky...clay-littered ground..." makes me think of 9/11. But all in all I have no idea what you're trying to get at.

Only major nitpick with the poem was I didn't like the repetition of "then" twice (lines 4, 5).