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the leaving (Free verse) by fair12
maybe the gravel was too thin
on the length of the roadway,
deep pockets gouged in and out
along the creek
somewhere the air stirred
and the yellow haze clouded
your eyes, clung to your tears,
and coated arms outstretched
and waiting
you donât tell often
of the leaving, but the pain
is there in all the words
you seldom speak
I picture you easily,
the boy; sandy blonde
and stumbling sadly,
the edge of the yard
so vast and ultra green
but I too can see the man;
hands upon the boys shoulders,
strength where there was none
before, and the boy waiting,
waiting for it all to pass
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5887
Posted: September 1, 2004 12:27 PM PDT; Last modified: September 1, 2004 12:27 PM PDT
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