poemranker ::Tweenager, they're called now. by fevriere

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Free verse № 107914

Tweenager, they're called now.

Member since 2004 · Posted 9 Jul 2004 · 3 comments

"Thus is more than you can aim unto," she purrs and draws out with a kittenish claw chewing (typical tweenager); she writes with her underformed form, *make a million of me* which embalms her dreams & books out of which she customised herself. Metaphor. (She thinks. Thoughts like these are safest unheard). She's a postmodern excerpt, a learning curve pleased to hear so but what makes me sad is her blissless ignorance of pubescent leaks shallow wells of sebum, strained sprained skin and the typical sick dream of being Thin (out of all of which: adulthood). I reply to assuage, my true tired self, my coarsely-honed whole-meal *make a wanton of me* (I embalm the tired dreams & books ready-made for her).

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[n/a] New Life Drug 10-Jul-04/12:14 AM Reply
ohhhhhhhhhh
[9] richa 10-Jul-04/2:24 PM Reply
"Thus is more than you can aim unto," Is a strange thing to say for a tweenager. Must have been watching Dawson's creek I guess.

I get the feeling of someone moving into young adulthood. There is apprehension in 'make a wanton of me' (I am guessing you use wanton in its precise sense of unchaste).

The relationship between the tweenager and the narrator is unclear. The same person, a younger sister maybe.

There is an elegance in the poem, a clear progression and a certain feeling of reflection. Very good.
[n/a] fevriere › richa 11-Jul-04/2:32 AM Reply
(Inarticulately): woo!