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Johnny Depp (Free verse) by Rilke4ClosetLesbians I suppose
.....this....
is all a girl wants,
really, a picture
of johnny depp was on
the front page
of her diary
slight frame enshrouded
in modest designer button-down
holding back
worlds of tenderness
the first three undone,
hair set to tousle,
hips invisible like
the ghost-image
that ties
their tired heads together
dizzied over
by their dream calling,
pursed piece
of tender lips
all the girls want.
Up the ladder:
Life's Vision Altered
Down the ladder:
Absolution
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Posted: July 8, 2004 7:50 PM PDT; Last modified: July 8, 2004 7:50 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2145653 Overall Rank: 4391 Comments:
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jessicazee @ 149.174.164.65
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8-Jul-04/10:22 PM
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Johnny can 21 jump street me anytime. nice.
Once I got past your name I could almost read the poem objectively.
"a picture" can go, along with the hips allusion. The ending seems a little too abrupt - or trite. Interested to see the rewrite. 255 view(s)
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