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Tale of a mermaid (Sonnet) by sanity How long I have wished that I could return
To the briny depths that was once my home
Although I knew all my bridges I'd burn
That chance I took, leaving behind that foam
It was alas for my obsessive heart
That I did choose this impassable path
But now my love has preferred to depart
I must now endure my family's wrath
I can hear them laughing, chanting, taunting
Swimming after me, that night long ago
Forever hearing, their words just haunting
But I didn't care, my heart was aglow
Now all I do is sit here and wonder
I miss my life in the wet blue yonder
Up the ladder:
The King Of Loserville
Down the ladder:
Writer's Block
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Posted: July 5, 2004 3:16 AM PDT; Last modified: July 5, 2004 3:16 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10073 Comments:
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Dovina @ 24.52.157.176
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5-Jul-04/9:09 AM
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I see the impassable path and your family's wrath, but not quite getting the last line. Was it really impassable?
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sanity @ 80.46.131.4
> Dovina
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5-Jul-04/2:02 PM
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it is the tale of a mermaid who once her path was chosen she would never be able to return to her life as a mermaid, so yes, it was impassable
Too many 'I's. Also the language is boring.
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