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Someday (Lyric) by moonlightdance Someday
The river of tears will run dry
I will mourn but I will not cry
Tears won't fog my eyes
And I'll see the truth
Someday
There'll be nothing left to feel
Maybe then I will know what is real
I'll have lived and grown old
And my heart will be cold
Numbed by pain
Nothing will hurt me
My heart will be strong
But I'll not be happy
At least not for long
I don't want to change
But they're no way around
Athough my hearts been smashed
And been thrown to the ground
I want to be in love
Forever
Up the ladder:
Malaysia
Down the ladder:
Creator of Filth
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Posted: June 24, 2004 8:41 AM PDT; Last modified: July 14, 2004 12:10 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.905148 Overall Rank: 9766 Comments:
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Dovina @ 24.52.157.176
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24-Jun-04/9:04 AM
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You have no choice. Go for it. Just be careful.
This isn't that great as a poem, but for some reason I like it. Would be better, methinks, as a lyric.
yeah i meant to put it as a lyric, it was just a careless mistake.
Verses 1 and 2 good. Verse 3 weak. Verse 4 doesn't make sense.
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