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Someday (Lyric) by moonlightdance

Someday The river of tears will run dry I will mourn but I will not cry Tears won't fog my eyes And I'll see the truth Someday There'll be nothing left to feel Maybe then I will know what is real I'll have lived and grown old And my heart will be cold Numbed by pain Nothing will hurt me My heart will be strong But I'll not be happy At least not for long I don't want to change But they're no way around Athough my hearts been smashed And been thrown to the ground I want to be in love Forever

Dovina 14-Jul-04/10:29 AM
Verses 1 and 2 good. Verse 3 weak. Verse 4 doesn't make sense.




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