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THE HIT (Free verse) by Torok
I take the hit The mind swims The body paralysed So this is euphoria? If so i never want to leave this cacoon of smoke and ash I attempt to speak but the silence overpowers me Everything makes sense, the trees, the sky, the body and soul and the numbness of my mind Hours pass Minutes seep into history Its my turn again I take the hit and collapse into a heap on the floor No movement apart from the mind I smile I think Another wasted day. Wasted

Up the ladder: On January's Terms
Down the ladder: Bread and blackthorns

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5832
Posted: June 22, 2004 12:10 PM PDT; Last modified: June 22, 2004 12:10 PM PDT
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[8] Brittanyy @ 64.12.116.140 | 6-Jul-04/10:39 AM | Reply
Alas! A poem of yours that I actually can relate to and understand!
[n/a] deleted user @ 24.222.81.233 > Brittanyy | 6-Jul-04/11:13 AM | Reply
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