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the bond we share (Free verse) by da_dark_wan There is no stronger bond
Than the bond we share now
No matter what happens
Nothing can go wrong
Where ever you are
Even if your time has gone
You shall always live
Live in my heart
With all the memories we shared
You will never be forgotten
There is no way that will happen
I will always have cared
There is no stronger bond
Than the bond we share now
No matter what happens
Nothing can go wrong
Up the ladder:
The Curse
Down the ladder:
whats love
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Posted: August 22, 2002 3:08 AM PDT; Last modified: August 22, 2002 3:08 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8211956 Overall Rank: 10839 Comments:
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Tarquin De La Bog @ 62.7.160.190
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22-Aug-02/10:17 AM
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Very poor. 1. I especially dislike the way you've repeated the first verse as the last verse. Whether it was to add emphasis or for some other reason I don't know, but it smacks of schoolboy poetry. The rest of the poem is simply dull; there is nothing in it to interest or engage me. Go away and do much better next time.
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