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the bond we share (Free verse) by da_dark_wan

There is no stronger bond Than the bond we share now No matter what happens Nothing can go wrong Where ever you are Even if your time has gone You shall always live Live in my heart With all the memories we shared You will never be forgotten There is no way that will happen I will always have cared There is no stronger bond Than the bond we share now No matter what happens Nothing can go wrong

Tarquin De La Bog 22-Aug-02/10:17 AM
Very poor. 1. I especially dislike the way you've repeated the first verse as the last verse. Whether it was to add emphasis or for some other reason I don't know, but it smacks of schoolboy poetry. The rest of the poem is simply dull; there is nothing in it to interest or engage me. Go away and do much better next time.




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