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Missing you (Free verse) by kawakurdi
There are no clouds in the sky There is no mist in the sea These are my tears Crying for you. There is no wind blowing There is no autumn fall These are my breaths Whose every season is fall. I miss you as a sky Whose stars have left it I miss you as a forest Whose trees have fled I groan at night, I weep in the day Itis you I miss, for you I pray.

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.2
Weighted score: 4.6662316
Overall Rank: 12237
Posted: August 21, 2002 4:32 PM PDT; Last modified: August 21, 2002 4:32 PM PDT
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[5] god'swife @ 209.179.135.105 | 21-Aug-02/7:20 PM | Reply
Terrific intil the last line. Feels like daddy was tellling you to hurry, turn off the lights and go to bed. This lovely poem deserves a stronger finish.
[0] ShaNoN+960317485 @ 199.40.206.3 | 20-Nov-03/6:04 AM | Reply
This i dont like from start to the end..i missed the point
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