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Missing you (Free verse) by kawakurdi There are no clouds in the sky
There is no mist in the sea
These are my tears
Crying for you.
There is no wind blowing
There is no autumn fall
These are my breaths
Whose every season is fall.
I miss you as a sky
Whose stars have left it
I miss you as a forest
Whose trees have fled
I groan at night, I weep in the day
Itis you I miss, for you I pray.
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Posted: August 21, 2002 4:32 PM PDT; Last modified: August 21, 2002 4:32 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.6662316 Overall Rank: 12242 Comments:
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god'swife @ 209.179.135.105
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21-Aug-02/7:20 PM
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Terrific intil the last line. Feels like daddy was tellling you to hurry, turn off the lights and go to bed. This lovely poem deserves a stronger finish.
This i dont like from start to the end..i missed the point
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