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Missing you

by kawakurdi

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Aug 2002 · 2 comments

There are no clouds in the sky There is no mist in the sea These are my tears Crying for you. There is no wind blowing There is no autumn fall These are my breaths Whose every season is fall. I miss you as a sky Whose stars have left it I miss you as a forest Whose trees have fled I groan at night, I weep in the day Itis you I miss, for you I pray.

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[5] god'swife 21-Aug-02/7:20 PM Reply
Terrific intil the last line. Feels like daddy was tellling you to hurry, turn off the lights and go to bed. This lovely poem deserves a stronger finish.
[0] ShaNoN+960317485 20-Nov-03/6:04 AM Reply
This i dont like from start to the end..i missed the point