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To Orange (Free verse) by Lifeboatman I try to veil my face
Whenever your moon tries to peep
From the clouds inside my eyelids
Yet even if I can deny
Such wond'rous sights to my mind's eye
I cannot deny Love of her proprietorship of me
For you color my sunset sky
Up the ladder:
Honey
Down the ladder:
Ouch
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Posted: June 7, 2004 3:49 PM PDT; Last modified: June 7, 2004 3:49 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.6666665 Overall Rank: 2081 Comments:
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SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.169.249
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7-Jun-04/5:28 PM
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Blessed with an eight. Go in peace.
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Lifeboatman @ 63.243.177.254
> SupremeDreamer
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7-Jun-04/10:12 PM
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thanks...
"wond'rous" should be "wondrous", dimwit.
thanks...
I really like the idea of what's being communicated in this poem. Though I think the title has gone over my head, and the word "proprietorship" mocks the rest of the words with its bulbous enunciation. All the other ones rolls so beautifully off my tongue but that one word kind of just... died. But still I enjoyed coming across this poemette, it whipped up a nice little smile across my face.
â¢Â°â¢Gregory Jamesâ¢Â°â¢
thanks...
nice
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