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The devils win (Free verse) by firestar_2580
You make my heart beat like thunder in a devils dome. You make me feel like a soldier who's just lost a challenging battle. This soldier is now lost at sea without he's soul but with a deep red robe to hold as the devil pull's him into the deep blue sea naked and traped for all eternity The soldier losses he's power of survival and the devil win's again and again though out eternity.

Down the ladder: regret

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.8
Weighted score: 4.9761596
Overall Rank: 8352
Posted: May 24, 2004 11:53 PM PDT; Last modified: May 24, 2004 11:53 PM PDT
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[2] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 | 25-May-04/4:57 AM | Reply
intense. truly stellar. 10
[2] Enkidu @ 204.98.23.2 | 25-May-04/7:01 AM | Reply
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Why do you even bother, this must have been written in a matter of forty-five seconds.
My shitty comment took longer than that. -2-
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