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she.

Member since 2004 · Posted 15 May 2004 · 13 comments

Out of the clay of nothingness and dirt, An artist sculpted my love story, Her statuesque is intertwined with mine; With Stars shining in her hair, my fairy tinuviel, Searching and wandering for her, time immemorial, Her love is like an age old wine; She walk the street at night, into the blue light, On Pegasys, wings fluttered, moon-chasing, starry ride, Lips kiss, comets will collide, skies will shine; Holding her hand, walking, kissing, loving, talking, Free as birds, weightless as astronauts, moon-walking, Dancing and tracing, romancing, eyes in line; Laying in arms, thrown back, legs intertwined, Elves singing, angels serving, in heavens we dine, A tear to a thought, her gentle touch, she is all mine.

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[0] Sasha 15-May-04/6:37 PM Reply
TOLKEIN IS DEAD. Unless you are Tolkein frozen cryogenically within minutes of death and then subsequently revived, which you are plainly not, please refrain from appropriating images, motifs and names (tinuviel) from The Lord of The Rings. Otherwise go to one of the multitudinous fanfic sites where you can write about gimli assraping an elf.

Thank you
[n/a] opiate › Sasha 17-May-04/11:50 AM Reply
Ok dude .. in no way was i inspired by LOTR .. and yes i like to visualise and use descriptions that help others visualise .. u have a problem with that?
[0] Sasha › opiate 17-May-04/2:06 PM Reply
Where'd Tinuviel come from then?
[n/a] opiate › Sasha 22-May-04/9:52 AM Reply
sorry to break it to you kiddo .. but tinuviel was also in greek mythology .. i wish you'd look things up before you speak.
[0] Sasha › opiate 22-May-04/10:48 AM Reply
Elves don't tho'
[0] Sasha › opiate 22-May-04/10:54 AM Reply
For that matter neither do fairies
[0] Sasha › opiate 22-May-04/11:02 AM Reply
I don't remember Tinuviel from any Greek mythology, and unless you can prove otherwise, I'm inclined to thinking you're BSing me. Here's why:

No greek words (including names) end in a Lambda or "L" sound It's always a vowel or Sigma or Nu.

Ancient Greek has no "V" sound.

So the name is obviously not Greek.

It's actually "Nightengale" in one of the Elvish languages Tolkein was making up with his more-abundant-than-is-healthy spare time.
[0] Sasha › Sasha 22-May-04/11:06 AM Reply
Sasha 69.138.236.6322-May-04/11:05 AM
Oh, one other thing.

If the word had been borrowed from Greek via Latin, then it could have a mute consonant ending (Like the borrowed "Iliad") but the romans took the greek upsilon ("u" sound) and always transcribed it with a "Y".

So the Romans never had it, the Greeks never had it.

I guess you must know more about Greek mythology than the Greeks themselves did.

[0] Sasha › Sasha 22-May-04/11:06 AM Reply
You Fail
[0] Sasha › Sasha 4-Jun-04/6:06 PM Reply
*gloats*
[8] titan69 16-May-04/1:00 AM Reply
Ilike this poem well done
[7] Bobjim 17-May-04/5:01 AM Reply
Isn't it spelt "pegasus"?
[n/a] opiate › Bobjim 17-May-04/11:49 AM Reply
it can be spelt either way..