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Little Bit of Life (Free verse) by alverland theme park
She’s just a little bit of life And she breathes air into mine Looking deep into her eyes Trying to see past the beautiful brown And see the beautiful soul inside As she brushes back her hair And reveals her face For the whole world to see For the whole world to admire Her exuberant smile Glistening in the light Makes me want to make her smile more With her childish laughter And the way she looks when the laughter kicks in Yea, she’s just a little bit of life But she’s a lot of perfection Sugar and spice, and everything nice Have nothing on her She’s gorgeous, She’s a little bit of life

Up the ladder: "America The Beautiful"
Down the ladder: So Shall I For You

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.75
Weighted score: 5.4706473
Overall Rank: 2847
Posted: May 7, 2004 8:34 PM PDT; Last modified: May 7, 2004 8:34 PM PDT
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[6] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 8-May-04/9:40 AM | Reply
Nice sentiment. I'd leave out the sugar and spice. And this kind of close feely poem is better for a person than it is for an audiance. If I were the person, I'd give a 10.
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