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Little Bit of Life (Free verse) by alverland theme park Sheâs just a little bit of life
And she breathes air into mine
Looking deep into her eyes
Trying to see past the beautiful brown
And see the beautiful soul inside
As she brushes back her hair
And reveals her face
For the whole world to see
For the whole world to admire
Her exuberant smile
Glistening in the light
Makes me want to make her smile more
With her childish laughter
And the way she looks when the laughter kicks in
Yea, sheâs just a little bit of life
But sheâs a lot of perfection
Sugar and spice, and everything nice
Have nothing on her
Sheâs gorgeous,
Sheâs a little bit of life
Up the ladder:
Limbs
Down the ladder:
xxxmas
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Posted: May 7, 2004 8:34 PM PDT; Last modified: May 7, 2004 8:34 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.4706473 Overall Rank: 2846 Comments:
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8-May-04/9:40 AM
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Nice sentiment. I'd leave out the sugar and spice. And this kind of close feely poem is better for a person than it is for an audiance. If I were the person, I'd give a 10.
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