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Untitled (Free verse) by purplestain You sliced my delicate heart in half
Pouring drops of agony drips from my broken heart
Why did you have to do this to me?
Why did you have to hurt me so?
You showed me so much hope
You showed me that you cared
You showed me that you loved
You showed me that you were real
I knew it would come to this
I knew we weren't meant to be
I knew I would lose you to someone else
I knew I have to somehow let it go
With the rest of my regrets
Someday someone will mend my broken heart
Someday someone will show me how to love again
Someday I will learn
Someday I will know why I wasn't meant for you
But for now, I must slip away
Goodbye my friend, I love you
Up the ladder:
The guests are leaving
Down the ladder:
Creative Destruction
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Posted: August 19, 2002 11:31 PM PDT; Last modified: August 19, 2002 11:31 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.7615943 Overall Rank: 11557 Comments:
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<{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154
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20-Aug-02/12:01 AM
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Someday someone will show you how to write, hopefully before you try again..
that was a first attempt. bad as it may be, it comes from within my heart and yes, someday i will learn how to write better. thanks anyway :-)
This is touching but too personal - this is plainly written straight from the heart without any objectifying distance. We can feel the pain and sincerity but it doesn't really hang together as a poem. Brave though to expose yourself like this.
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