| Re: Life/Death (revised) by devotedwonder |
1-Aug-02/7:05 AM |
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a line is drawn. i stand with the dead fetuses.
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| Re: The Long Night by Tangerines |
31-Jul-02/11:20 AM |
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waiting, like your mom was/is in the picture? is she smiling? who took the picture? i want more. i guess you hooked me. you teased me. good job.
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| Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
31-Jul-02/10:33 AM |
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you know you love apple pie.... J baked a fresh one and locked it in the pantry of desire, but left the window open just a crack so its sinful steam would steal silently, secretly, deviously... until, having infused its essence, you surrender your soul... leaving you nude. with pie crumbs ornamenting your dark triangle of shame.
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| Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil |
31-Jul-02/10:04 AM |
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ode to obsession and passion overwhelming. i grok. aside: read 'perfume' (a novel) by patrick susskind.
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| Re: frustration is the lamp i'm holding by silvertongueddevil |
31-Jul-02/9:24 AM |
lamplighter, bring me a lamp.
i like being turned around like that, and told a secret.
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| Re: Zen by necroscope7 |
31-Jul-02/8:38 AM |
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heh. a 'physically challenged' paranoid zen lumberjack. don't that beat all.
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| Re: HOW DO I WRITE by kawakurdi |
31-Jul-02/6:50 AM |
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i like the idea very much, but i think the final stanza loses steam a bit. it's more...vernacular, maybe, than the images you paint in the rest of the poem
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| Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
31-Jul-02/6:39 AM |
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i'm ALWAYS nude. it makes the day go smoothe. ly. um. er. mmm. -=Dark_Angel=-, keep churning em out. keep reminding us of our *essential* baseness. keep your dart gun pointed at ignorants. [sic] p.s. who holds the key to unlock your nudity?
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| Re: Hip Nos by kthulah |
30-Jul-02/9:19 AM |
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ooh. ooh. ah. nice meter. nice alliteration. nice mood. "it's the sharp in shards of a gem" sharp poem.
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| Re: I Hate You by mytenderrage |
30-Jul-02/9:14 AM |
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stain upon my screen / her emotions manifest, / scathe my jellied orbs.
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| Re: I Hate You by mytenderrage |
30-Jul-02/7:28 AM |
so, you got dumped. you wrote this to help process the pain. very constructive. maybe your therapist would have been a more receptive audience than the crowd here?
last time i checked, poetry utilized metaphor to express ideas.
maybe he dumped you because you have no imagination???
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| Re: Ode to Bad poetry by unknown |
26-Jul-02/6:54 AM |
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so, what do you care about?
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| Re: Jericho by goldfish |
25-Jul-02/11:24 AM |
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'ages are such fickle things'...'marble never lives'...two of my favorite pieces of a well-crafted and rhythmic treat. nice.
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| Re: Wounded by RobinGayle |
22-Jul-02/9:18 AM |
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how many times does will you take it, as a woman, before the healing begins?
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| Re: wednesday night after church by unknown |
18-Jul-02/12:47 PM |
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| Re: she wonders, by <~> |
17-Jul-02/7:15 AM |
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exactly the effect i was hoping for...
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| Re: Beauty, Beware by Jsylum |
17-Jul-02/7:06 AM |
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i like the first 2 stanzas, but the 3rd leaves me unsatisfied
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| Re: Sea Struck by Jsylum |
17-Jul-02/7:04 AM |
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rock me in the cradle of this soft sursurrant sea
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| Re: THE DEFENSE RESTS by horus8 |
17-Jul-02/7:03 AM |
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left-in-the-lurch loquatious leo vs. leaving lesbian lawyer...a jaunty little tale
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| Re: Birth in the Valley of Liquor by horus8 |
17-Jul-02/6:40 AM |
ah, but do you know how flammable i can get....especially in high gear at my well-programmed best?
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