Re: a comment on First Unborn Sun by Been Here Before	23-Feb-06/11:23 AM
Thank you. This elliminates the "it" and I believe keeps the poem a little more to form. See what you think.
Re: a comment on First Unborn Sun by Been Here Before	23-Feb-06/11:17 AM
Yes. Melmichelle@hotmail.com is the only e-mail address that I really use. I just could not figure out how to log in without another one, and I did not even remember what I had logged in on as years ago. I just recently found my way back to computers, so those things allude me. I've spent so much time in cafes with pens and paper since Merlin took the computer, but people say I need to up-grade, so here I am ... again. I like Myspace only because all my true friends seem to have a home there and it is easy for me to talk to all of them at once. It is a great out-let and a new environment for me. -Mel P.S. Can you still get a hold of NFG - Writing With Attitude? I want to subscribe if it still exists. Thanks for the warm welcome!
Re: a comment on First Unborn Sun by Been Here Before	22-Feb-06/11:14 AM
Thanks. That help. I was trying to stick to the true Vilanelle in that I assumed I needed 10 syllables, rather to match "my mind idles in creeping death of gray." I'm trying to teach myself other forms of writing aside from my spoken word rants. Poetry should flow on paper as well as out of the mouth. The theatre in me assumes that everyone can hear things the way I write them. I do much prefer it without "it" and will change this. Keep commenting on my work plese.
Re: a comment on First Unborn Sun by Been Here Before	22-Feb-06/12:20 AM
Yes. Life has been entertaining. I thought I would come back and get my poetry worked over a again. My form poems don't flow and my free verse is WAY too free. I must watch that typing though. I tend to write while drinking and send them off a bit quick. Any how, I am working more towards spoken word than anything and much of my writing is geared in that dirrection. As far as my e-mail address, I could not remember anything from the last time I was here (5 years ago), so I reverted to the only other e-mail I have. I never check quickfinger, it is always the Melmichelle@hotmail.com, but I'm computer dumb. Well, back to Myspace to write more blogs. How have you been?
Re: eat a grape please by skaskowski	9-May-02/1:30 AM
Next to his keyboard: Crack rocks. Crack rocks the size of his HEAD.