on Baby Turtle Hop by ruella
29 May 2002, 12:13 AM
Your comments demonstrate that you don't have a gnack for finding success with (1) public reading, or (2) small children. *:) Stick around and learn something, Po-dog! RMB
on some deleted poem
30 May 2002, 12:34 AM
By specifying the image of a "fh that stinks" you create a redundancy. It's like saying "ocean that's wet" or "mustard sauce that tastes like mustard." Does this imply that there are fh that do NOT stink? Now you're silly. So, rewrite that first part again & this pome may make more sense.
on Navel Action by BadPoet
28 May 2002, 4:51 AM
Playful but ultimately acerebral.
on actually chicken and mushroom pies are nice too by cav
28 May 2002, 4:57 AM
This poem utterly and blatently and purposefully ignores the themes that drive modern poetry. It is insultingly apolitical. If all poems were about what food we like to eat, then literary schollars of the future would be as boring as dieticians. A history of what peoplr like to eat and that is all. Everyone hates dieticians! If the sausages represented something alegorically the poem would have been OK. Maybe the conflict of feminism as a belief vs. feminism as a tenet? PS I like chorizo
on Untitled #4 by LucidRevelation
24 May 2002, 5:16 AM
Homer f?r Thomas Edison algerlega ? heilan eftir a? Lisa segir honum a? Edison hafi fundi? upp peruna, filmuna, mikr?f?ninn og fleira, ?? a? hann hafi fyrst tali? hana vera anskotans lygara. Hann ?kve?ur a? ver?a sj?lfur uppfinningama?ur me? misg??um ?rangri.
on some deleted poem
24 May 2002, 12:52 AM
High Fantasy has been done, baby! Besides, what are cars doing in a Lord of the Rings setting? And aren't dwarves more interested in gold and helmets? PS The last line doesn't rhyme
on some deleted poem
22 May 2002, 12:36 AM
If the surplus 'e' on "Indeed not!" is intended as a poetic flourish.... run with it, baby! Though it is completely ludicrous. There is no SHOE HELL.
on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
24 May 2002, 12:48 AM
There is a poems like this on the wall of the lavatory in the McNaughten Hotel in Fairfax. Did you write those too, or was it someone else?