i kinda wanted "some" and "none" to rhyme, which they do. but yeah its just a silly poem.

thanks for your feedback!

negative feedback is great. especially to someone like me who has never written poetry before. i thank you. i will heed your advise in future poems i write. now, just some advise for you. by all means as i said give negative feedback on someones work, if they are half as mature as they should be they know not to take any advise personally. however when people give offensive and negative PERSONAL feedback to someone, it can be quite damaging. your opening sentence in your reply does just that. fortunately, i recognised your criticism as an attempted constructiveness. try to be more careful because you may just offend someone more fragile than me. thanks again for your input.