on Rock and Roll by wilco
7 Mar 2007, 11:09 PM
nice personification...i think the whole stanza should not be reapeated considering the lyric as a whole is a short one...may be repeating one or two key lines would be better. The lyric makes its point clear in a motivated sense. good attempt.
on A Rendezvous by lrustagi
7 Mar 2007, 11:03 PM
as an afterthought, i suppose "Sleepless" might be a better title...the readers pls. also suggest an apt title .