| Re: Bilateral by Hadasl |
21-May-05/12:22 PM |
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Liked the title.....interesting rhyming scheme but found the rhymes themselves too obvious. Content seemed unfocused.... obvious passion but was this written for the reader or the author ?
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| Re: Cardiovascular workout formula by abi |
21-May-05/12:25 PM |
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Quite jolly ! Even for a comic piece the repetition of "go" in lines 5 and 6 is iritating !
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
22-May-05/12:23 PM |
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Yep, I think the phrase "Masturbatory madness" just about sums it up.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
22-May-05/12:35 PM |
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