on A Fool's Errand by ALChemy
27 Dec 2005, 1:26 PM
Didn't like the ending.
on sick and demented by sk8boardandpoems
2 Oct 2005, 12:55 PM
It's good but for the beginning, middle and end.
on Fourteen Years by impert&ent
2 Oct 2005, 12:48 PM
'Sparkbrook' didn't do it for me. Liked the imagery, though they didn't seem to flow very well.
on Make Music in Your Heart by Dovina
5 Apr 2005, 11:37 PM
The content is great, but the flow is awful. Though there were some mediocre lines, for example:
'This is how I learned the piano
and how Iâve learned to write now'
It sounds like a 5 year old wrote it. And by the way, we are all still learning.
The flow seems very elementary and abecedarian, so please work on that.
As well, learn to accept criticism. Your comments to the reviews, (any comment to reviewing, if not for elucidation, is wrong in my opinion) were extremely puerile. Accept it, and move on. You shouldn't try to fight with people to change their views to ones you agree with. Be mature.
'This is how I learned the piano
and how Iâve learned to write now'
It sounds like a 5 year old wrote it. And by the way, we are all still learning.
The flow seems very elementary and abecedarian, so please work on that.
As well, learn to accept criticism. Your comments to the reviews, (any comment to reviewing, if not for elucidation, is wrong in my opinion) were extremely puerile. Accept it, and move on. You shouldn't try to fight with people to change their views to ones you agree with. Be mature.