regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/10:05 AM
This is pretentious garbage. I rate the postings. I am not about to write your 'poem' by telling you word for word what is wrong. There are a lot of people who are helpful in that direction. I do not see any way to help this posting. It is bad. You are not good enough to deserve the zero I give you.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/10:06 AM
sight hold-breath shoot
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/10:07 AM
more than overdone subject and badly done to boooot
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/10:08 AM
watch away
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/10:15 AM
You are just another whining fool. I rate other 'poets'. Someday you might be one if you allow ignorance and self-masturbatory-love dissipate. This is what I get from your 'poetry'. This is how you get better. This is my advice to you. You are welcome to read and rate my poetry. I write poetry.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/10:27 AM
ritter! How Many clones of you are there? You are probably not as liked as you think. You PICK AND CHOOSE what you see. I rate 'poetry' on this site. I am not your teacher. I do not want to be your teacher. I have set myself the task of reading and rating every posting here except my own. Scream. Hide your head under the covers! You post it. I'll rate it. Write a real poem. Or Well You Could Remain a *PATHETIC WHINER*.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/10:42 AM
Just another self-absorbed person. Go chase your frisbee critter. Do you roll over and shake hands on command? I hope your physical being is healthier than your mental one. There is a difference between reading and rating. You have not rated anything. I doubt you are capable of getting that far out of yourself.
Re: Students by Blue Magpie	woodstock20000 209.40.29.18	15-Jun-05/12:12 PM
Coming from the viewpoint of a teacher's assistant, I found it wonderful. *smile*
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/12:27 PM
Yes. You have been here two days. Already you are giving orders as to how you should be treated. Personally, I do not care if you read or rate other poets. You will find some of the top poets are the same person and are only at that rating by rigging the vote. This site is an unregulated democracy. As such, you can have as many logons as you wish and can hold long discourses with yourself as some people do. As to your worth as a poet... Whatever gave you the idea that you were good? Have you actually read any? Again I don’t care. You may define an object or thing as you wish; it does not make it so. The whole-in-the-sand you have your head stuck in is going to be awfully difficult to get out of with the amount of swelling caused by self stroking. I can’t respect you. First there must be some substance. Anyway, you asked for this discourse, I was willing to merely give your poems their vastly over-rated zero. You are far from a pleasant person.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/1:21 PM
Whine and Whimper. In my experience people tend to gravitate towards those who pet them. You are obviously not very intelligent. I know this statement means nothing to you. It is beyond your understanding perhaps. Your answer to honest critique is to desire to smash me with your fists. Such a wonderful critter you are. I can understand why everyone likes you. Such a PATHETIC WHINING BRAT. Do you hold your breath until you pass out blue on the floor? It is nice that you considered rating me. None of your votes will register if you are not loged on. Not that they are not applied, just that anonymous is hard to be.
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/1:41 PM
I am not going to pet you. It does not matter how much you beg. I did not say anything about your friends other than to say that you personally gravitate towards what masturbates your ego or strokes your belly. I have no interest in what other people think of you or how you get off on them. As a poet, you are not! That is a very simple statement. WHINE WHIMPER MOAN, I sure am glad I have never known you. That is, until now, and what a messed up nastily constructed little piece of work you are.
Re: One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	15-Jun-05/2:02 PM
Very, very nice. I'd like to see a span of beats, maybe 3 before that last word -
regarding some deleted poem...	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.63	15-Jun-05/2:39 PM
in the first verse I feel confused by the possessive apostrophe on "mans'" then in the next line you write "mind" as if 'man' has a collective mind. The rest of your poem uses the word 'man' in a plural sense. and -- I'm thinking you are a space alien since you find no sympathy in yourself for mankind (sociopath or space alien...you choose). So, good job for a space alien.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.63	15-Jun-05/2:46 PM
I don't get it. I guess I'll try reading it again. Sometimes I'm just dense. I think I missed a metaphor or something.
Re: Between the Edges by woodstock20000	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 69.231.20.63	15-Jun-05/2:49 PM
loving/hating -- wonderful/wrenching. I tend to use this type of dissonance too much in what I write about love.
Re: Impeccable mess by sk8rs_rule_all	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	15-Jun-05/4:39 PM
Hmm...quite a lengthy poem there. It's like a short stroy. O well...I guess different poets have their unique ways to present their poems. And apparently your one of them. Perhaps try putting this "paragraph-like" poem into individual sentences? Maybe that'll make it more appealing and facinating. Just a suggestion. -6-
regarding some deleted poem...	xxx 68.166.37.185	15-Jun-05/4:46 PM
Okay dimmer than dim whit, you post it I rate it. And since you insisted, I comment. If you do not want to be rated by me, don't post. I am not telling you not to post, just that I know you are hiding in your bed with the covers over your head. I see you. Peek-A-Boo.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	15-Jun-05/6:40 PM
I like this one. The open ending is fitting. A bit long, though. Feel that stanz 10 has no adding value to speak of, maybe you should delete it altogether.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	15-Jun-05/6:48 PM
Yes, there should be a law against I'LL LOVE YOU FOREVERANDONEDAY poems and poems about trying to write poems. Unless they are side-splitting funny.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	15-Jun-05/6:54 PM
The last stanza is interesting. The rest is quite boring and of a message like 'Now you be a nice species, and you'll might go places in the universe'. A good tightening and toning down of moral florals is what it needs.