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on For M. B. by Tits
15 Oct 2003, 8:46 AM
Excellent. -10-
note to self: don't make the title of the piece be the only line that falls flat.
make "a poisonous mushroom" be "poisonous mushrooms" and it will flow better, imo.
this is not your sport, 195.157.153.253
Talk about a interesting nightmare. Great job.
Excellent as (I think) always.
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If you are going to post and know the rules, the chastisement and demand that someone not vote how they feel is in very bad taste. You may as well say, "Don't look at me unless you give me a ten." If the admonishment in the beginning is part of the poem, such as "I am now dead. Judge me, but do not send me to the lowest level of Hell!â I think it is good writing...otherwise not. Considering a personâs feelings is important, usually only to the person considered. A work is put here to be critted. As this is presented as a Eulogy and you are demanding special treatment for sympathy, I give you a cold-hearted 10.
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Excellent. -10-