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Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) (Free verse) by wilco

How long ago did you fall out of love? How long since he's mattered at all? Maybe there's something left inside, hidden among the pain and longing. You've given up but you won't give in. Taking the long road to go the short way. If there's any happy days left to find, you'll find them when you break your heart. Standing quietly on the platform, waiting for a train that never comes. Sometimes you just have to let go, babe. Face the things that you fear the most, if for no other reason than to see. Always talking to the ghosts of your past. A waterfall coming faster than before. We're all afraid of being forgotten, but you're afraid of being remembered. Always waiting in the wings and stalling. Bleeding yourself waiting for a push. But your room's getting smaller these days, and you're gonna have to see the world. Sometimes you just have to let go, babe. ...and don't worry...you'll be fine.

hypatia 19-Apr-04/1:19 PM
I hate to rewrite anyone's poem, but I think you should change these lines: "you'll find them after your heart is broken" and "if for no other reason than to let them go" and "A waterfall coming faster and stronger" and "But your room's getting smaller these days."
Not bad, or wouldn't have gone to the trouble.




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