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A Quick Lick Of Yellow (Free verse) by Jeremi B. Handrinos

A quick lick of yellow Corona and slaves hauling more stones down path lit with hibachi. Plying the night constructing houses for Gods ennobled by hands, many hands, with fingers powdered by lime. Imbibing Ra and Osiris working a magical curium Summoning things with more names to prefecture. Then remember me Pharaoh In this quick lick of yellow as the waters miasma to find us middlebrow & wicked. My dream I scans over pyramids Watching the world swallow itself out of need and set up I am eternally sessile. A quick lick of yellow Timelessly uracil.

hypatia 6-Apr-04/2:36 PM
A lesson in dictionary usage, and things Egyptian and Japanese. Miasma is a noun, but that's ok. Uracil is a colorless, crystalline, pyrimidine base, and not too well known. I'd prefer a more common word. Same for sessile.




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