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Salt (Free verse) by <~>

Water to wash away the stain of mundane. Lick my wounds, surging surf And pepper me with ablutive spray. Of the earth, I am bound to what is Mine. My blood swells; I curse Flat out lies from his lips And vinegar now in his kiss Pass the man over, he is not worth It, taking that risk. Pan him, can him: don't go astray. Preserve yourself from the hurt Cellared in my spirit. Stay away. Shaker, mover, faker, loser--you poured it In my wounds, blinded me with lies, Petered me away. I have come to despise All these lines. I am done with you, done with it.

horus8 14-Aug-02/11:45 AM
morning z...the ending is a leaning crucifix of young sailors tormented by salt peter and morning wood wet dreams, plus the structure makes it go in lots of different directions..lots of stuff happening here...treasure chest tawny flesh, grandma lovers it!




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