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I Hate You (Free verse) by mytenderrage

I despise you. You took my heart, And ripped it in to shreds. Until there was nothing left. I detest you. You stabbed my chest Until my blood flowed out Into a puddle of crimson Beneath my aching figure. Until there was a hole Of emptiness within My abused body, Helpless and hopeless, Cold and dead. You had offered me warmth, But I was so na??ve. I believed you. I wanted you. I did not anticipate All this pain All this hurt. You went away With hardly a farewell. How dare you go And leave me all alone? I am so lonely, I need someone. I hate you, I hate you. You hurt me the most When you didn???t mean to. I hate you, I hate you. You left my life forever, With barely a farewell. I hate you, I hate you. I hate you because I love you.

horus8 3-Aug-02/6:07 PM
highschool? coffee? austin?????? here quick cure for both the raven and the chalupa. tequila, kurt vonnegut. descriptive life experiences. name a character! fuck anything, because this piece is beyond aroma therapy..i ..mean it's fine for an envelope band a stamp. mail it to the cockstretcher if you like. it would work if you told the reader interesting tid bits to keep ,them going, give them a reason to love you and hate him. this is not your journal it is a forum, so fight with wit or suck moose tit(you'll be fine water off the back of the swallow, duck, pigeon,whatever) use detail, power words an unusual stucture a metaphor a simile an oxymoron.ahhhh.drink.smoke. eat with the pigs. learn how they speak then show them your hoof and they will listen, but you must speak pig. vine.swine toast. ufo




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