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Under Blood Oak (Lyric) by horus8

Pin wheels and down time look what they've done to me straw hats and squeezed lime Our time at the Red Sea. Dead fish unite and bridge the slipperiest twilights Collapsing my foresight Yeah, I guess you were right to leave while I slept. Dogwoods and blood oak the strangest of moods here The calmest of tides soak Just why we did come clear. My face in your smooth palms impressioned the white sand I never dared understand How godless we'd demand Us deep in the Red Sea. Stretch limbing dusks' arc The red under your bark And how you left your mark On me, never the seasons... Again, forever, I say good bye To why you ever made me pry That far into you at the Red Sea These blood oaks, they keep me... From you, my love.

Freethinker1602 6-Oct-03/1:39 AM
and now to rate it. I think it is a piece worthy of praise there for I give you a 9 to bad there can't bea 6, right ;) kidding of course




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