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I Hate You (Free verse) by mytenderrage

I despise you. You took my heart, And ripped it in to shreds. Until there was nothing left. I detest you. You stabbed my chest Until my blood flowed out Into a puddle of crimson Beneath my aching figure. Until there was a hole Of emptiness within My abused body, Helpless and hopeless, Cold and dead. You had offered me warmth, But I was so na??ve. I believed you. I wanted you. I did not anticipate All this pain All this hurt. You went away With hardly a farewell. How dare you go And leave me all alone? I am so lonely, I need someone. I hate you, I hate you. You hurt me the most When you didn???t mean to. I hate you, I hate you. You left my life forever, With barely a farewell. I hate you, I hate you. I hate you because I love you.

Bachus 30-Jul-02/4:52 PM
This reminded me of the time I was in my 67 camaro, and I went to light my cigarette with the car lighter, but lo and behold. No cigarette their. I am now deformed not only by this piece of writing, but also by that mindless incident. {Legend} At least the poet with the symbols in his name has work out there to be critiqued (proper spelling) if quoting. Count how many times the bird chick uses the word "i" multiply that by how many "you"s, then divide by number of characters present: Answer is on page 57 of William Burroughs inciteful legendary work "The Job". Something that I believe none of you "poets" seem to have. Happy Hunting Hecate




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