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faulty fate (Free verse) by Nirvana13666

Our minds so clouded by the impediments of expectations Left breathless by failure Frightened to attempt because disenchantment lurks Losing only made the winner stronger in the end And if you don’t suffer defeat I don’t see how you can identify it as a triumph Minds so riled up at world Lost in all the commotion and vulnerable to the confusion We forget how to smile innocently And we don’t recall why we can’t struggle against intimacy We lose sense of rebelliousness and fall into mendaciousness Helplessness won’t aid you on the journey of an original life It will surely leave you bitter and wish-less cause all you ever did was wish for it. No time for metaphorical lines of inspiration Walk through time looking through your own eyes Disregard demise and step into life

horus8 21-Aug-03/11:30 AM
Sounds like you need to condense this into a fortune cookie and sit on it for another ten weeks.




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