horus822 Jul 2003

"Crossed arms, standing over the hallway
The angel cries, all it has tried
to make me see..To save me,
Failed".

Yes, very good. Find your subjects and explore them intigrating yourself, so it becomes organic and not self absorbed. I would suggest strengthening your vocabulary and grammar next, but you got the right idea. writing every day on poemranker will teach you that. 7.