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Yellow Star (Free verse) by Mr Pig

Yellow stars in a pit of faces, Staring transfixed from their tomb, At their possessions neatly stacked by ‘perfect mortals’ Suitcases aligned outside the shower room, Emblazoned in names or chalk epitaphs, That stands beside a leather mountain of heels. The drone of a single shaver, Removing the perfect hair, That will be used for textiles to seam more yellow stars, The sick irony of death bearing death, And the whooping cough of a typhoid stricken child, Walking with her mother mild, To the room of no return. In the shower room I sit half a century on, Thinking of the nameless gone, In this room I recall the Mothers, Who would try to help their babies breathe By making them suckle on desperate nipples, Both dying in the shape that they lived in the womb, Where screams turned to smoke that would bellow for hours, I break down in the shower room. I remain haunted by the corrugated corridors, The squeak and lingering echo of recycled boots on shiny floors, Where laughing Nazis would walk to block 11, To purify Jews by liquid suffocation, I see a name carved in to granite, Next to rows of seven stripes until the abrupt end, Continued on to a whole wall, These are horrors I can never comprehend, It leaves me sore, From my one single day in Sobibor.

horus8 21-Jul-03/2:55 PM
Well, for one it's missing a contrast. You might think the Jews died karmicly unjustified but Germany was going through a major depression after world war 1, where the German people were starving, dying, jobless, and watching their country be stolen from them by the Jews, their jobs, their land, their way of life. They were infiltrated by the holy land just like the palestinians are being now. That's why when hitler came to power people sided with him, Mr. Pig, because he had a point. Do you think people would just jump on board any posse or lynch squad unless there was a reason? So why don't you mention what the Jews were doing to the Germans to piss them off so much? Or do you even know? My friend if you are going to expose evil, do it right, do you think the devil was kicked out of heaven because he was entirely wrong and without a good argument? You're wrong. Don't shave evils face and put it in a tux with a devilish mustache pull with no back story. The Jews died horrifically and they should not of had to die like that, but you know what? they should have been a bit more sensitive to the peoples struggle in the country the were in. They crossed the picket line and took peoples jobs, they starved familys out and made the German men feel impudent in a time when most German men were dead from the first war. It's was a horrible tome and the Jews migrated in by the millions and made a serious situation much worse, but of course history books barely mention that. Point being Mr. Pig the German people struggled too we are after all discussing revenge, stupid one sided pent up frustrated revenge. That's when women and children suffer the most for the down right impudencce of men. A man with no job, has no penis and he will lash out at those that took his job and his penis it's very simple mr. pig, very simple.




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