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Obsidian Reflection (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

I finger fucked myself into oblivion, While staring into an obsidian Mirror. Discovering terror That slept within: The spirit that decided to begin A dream voyage using animalistic lust. Requiring the explosion Of the aspiring poets pudendum And prick. ____________________ To ignite explosion: -------------------- Achieve chemical alteration Of thought, without Requesting pot. He accomplished it with the stroke Of flesh, which exploded Into sticky string galaxies. Now called the milky way. Results pointed to a new Dreamers ability to create Imagination fantasy code. To program new, Systematic-euphoric, style. It could take ten years Grey hair appears Reflected from the obsidian Mirror. A forbidden emotion surges Called challenge. Now comes the saga Of an extreme resolve To evolve: From puerile mental universe Into united power processing Named Dreamer Supreme. -------- ======== [I'm not sure if i accomplished giving my poetry style, but I'll go out on a limb and call this my first attempt at it]

horus8 30-Jun-03/2:12 PM
pudendom, lol. Good, much better, you've taken some risks here and I did see an imaginitive improvement. It still shit, but I chuckled quite a bit and that's big in my little world "Named Dreamer Supreme". lol, you crack me up, here's an eight so skate. You're lucky I'm performing this eve and I'm giddy.




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