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motel 666 (Free verse) by crwncka1

i would like to welcome you to this place this place where i pass my days this place that is not mine i say for i do not own this place i speak of but i reassure you it is a permanent fixture and always has been in this seems forever time I've lived here in this place with four walls but this place today seems to have forever changed my mind tells me for today these walls spoken of course still appear standing firm as ever no longer separate me no longer imprison me for today these walls appear to be just what they always where instead of what my mind thought they where just something made of dust

horus8 8-Jun-03/1:23 PM
"for today these walls spoken of
course still appear standing firm as ever" you could make this legible in a future edit, because it sucks and ruins your poem, since it makes no fucking sense.

"appear to be just what they always where" were, not where. and again in the line after that "where" is were.




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