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Water Runs Deep (Free verse) by shwenatjadeflower

I am a placid lake with still waters that run deep. I wonder what people consider the good in me. I hear the winter frost crackling over top of me. I see the air nipping at the valley surrounding me. I want to imagine the future. I am a placid lake with still waters that run deep. I pretend I can soar over the country. I feel the encompassing tune of a string quatet and it moves me. I touch the beautiful blue of the sky as I reflect it. I worry that I am like flypaper, drawing you in, never to be released. I cry because I could be the ping pong ball guided by the paddle and hand with no idea where I'll land. I am a placid lake with still waters that run deep. I understand that the stillest waters hide the most potent currents. I say that the world is forgetting. I dream of a world where everyone's waters run deep.

horus8 21-May-03/8:12 PM
"quatet" it could only be better if it was a twatet. Could you incorporate say... waterskiing sumo wrestlers playing ping pong in between jumps, because that would be even more damn organic.




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