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The Guardian Shadow (Free verse) by loneshadow29

Tears of the fallen Embraced by gentle slumber heartbreak and sorrow rest in peace The lonely shadow has now found his place Amongst the many and the few Forever and always shall he be The guardian of the broken hearted The savior of the sorrowed Forever shall he bring peace Amidst the chaos of life itself Never meant is he To find the true love he desires Only does peace he shall know Of the happiness he shall bring To the ones he cares for Shattered dreams will befall him Hopefully he shall rebuild what once was of the hopes of his fallen brethren On a throne of sorrow shall he sit But yet held in such high esteem For their savior the shadow has become The rebuilder of shattered dreams

horus8 4-May-03/10:54 PM
"Amongst the many and the few".
Yeah, kind of like an out of order soda machine at an airport in Syracuse.

"On a throne of sorrow shall he sit" No, croutch.

"The rebuilder of shattered dreams" I think what you meant to say was scattered legumes.




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