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Salt Water (Free verse) by OneFingerAnswer

Funny drops, these bits of salted water Just as their fluid magnifies what we see through them, Their presence magnifies what we feel through them Sadness deepens to despair Joy rises and sores Anger burns and flares Laughter bursts and bubbles ever more And when we cry for no reason, That silly emptyness rings Vibrating deeper and louder Shaking to the very core As if the tears were meant to flow out with every echoed boom Leaving in their wake a vast and meaningless container Running on our faces Leaving trails Like some dried Dead Sea Salted and lifeless

horus8 19-Apr-03/4:30 PM
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As if the tears were meant (to) flow out with every echoed boom.
Leaving in their wake (a) vast and meaningless container". couple erps here, but otherwise, 'right on'.




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