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Too Nearly Remembered (Other) by AtalantaPendragonne

Closing my eyes I almost see you Just the ghost of the shape of your face Just someone I thought I knew I say it again but can't make it true Yesterday is the farthest place Closing my eyes I almost see you What were those things we used to do? Just once there might be, instead of empty space, Just someone I thought I knew A day's just something to get through. Are memories something you can replace? Closing my eyes I almost see you If there had been some sign, some clue Was there a waver in your embrace? Just someone I thought I knew Why should doubts return anew? I will not live at yesterday's pace Closing my eyes I almost see you Is that my choice; forget or rue? I can only deny what I cannot erase Closing my eyes I almost see you Just someone I thought I knew

horus8 27-Feb-03/2:12 PM
That was pleasent, for an 'other'. It must be terribly awkward to try so hard only to be ignored consistantly. nice vilanelle. The rhyme scheme was almost as complex as the story, or a haircut.




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