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Moo Gai Pai lover (dedicated to Settle) (Villanelle) by Sylvia Bravo

"Me love you long time" With penis tucked between her legs Why should it be a crime? For $5 she is all mine Gives me head and then she begs "Me love you long time" Now, I feel like slime Call my wife and tell her about Moo Gai Pengs and I Why should it be a crime? After pornos and jacking off to Sublime I hit the streets just to find my Pengs "Me love you long time" Another $5 gone, Moo Gai doesn't waste time Asahi, shower, then pornos and perhaps some ping pong. Why should it be a crime? Tomorrow back home to the Mrs. Nicholas Prime Counting sheep..1,2,3,4,5,89,pong, pong, ping, pengs "Me love you long time" Why should it be a crime?

horus8 20-Feb-03/11:50 AM
What i thought was impressive was how you rhymed pengs,pong, I, and begs while maintaining absolutely no cohesiveness. You should get a life and give up on writing, before the stupid in you catches up with the psychotic desperation. THE SOONER YOU ADMIT TO THE FACT THAT you are an uneducated lesbian in need of thorazine, the sooner your dreams of being a papaya farmer with a mustache and cock will come true. Until then though, this is not a vilanelle, or sadly even remotely funny. Settle is gay and into rock hard hot biceps and shafts a pumping. not desperate idiots on the verge of garbage disposing their own faces out of sheer pathetic loneliness, and the fact that no one gives a shit.




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